My First Entry of My Poetry Tell me if its good or bad

My First Entry of My Poetry ***Tell me if its good or bad!!***

My Poetry

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hey guys........do you think that i can write poems good? well just in case you may not be sure or are like "how am i suppose to know?", then I'll give you a sample of one of my poems. If you dont like homoness, then dont read the poem.

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*He Kissed Him*

The wind blew in my face
My hair swong in the breeze
He helt his hand and kissed it.
He cried and fell on his knees,
"Kiss my eyes and lay me to sleep"
he said to the other.
The standing one kissed him, hugged
him, and they held hands so that
everyone could see.
I watched them
A cold, chilly autume evening.
Leaves blowing, dancing in the sky.
"I love you" he said to him.
They waited as time passed them by.
He kissed him.
They felt love in the air,
But only others could stare.
They walked some more.
I decided to follow them
He said to him,
"Do you love me?"
"Yes"
"If you really loved me then you would hold me, and kiss me, and
would never let me go!"
He kissed him.
The wind blew in my face,
as wind chimes made music.
It was so romantic.
HE KISSED HIM.

by Iccess McMorgan
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If you liked the poem, then tell me so. If you really liked the poem and thought it was vague, then send it to some of your friends. I really like that poem because when I had first made it up, it was based on Davey Havok and Jade Puget from AFI until I found out that they are not gay. Then I was kinda bumbed out because of it. Then I decided that I could keep it on them because you don't really know what some people are. Even if you really like them! The poem also means that you shouldn't judge people by what race they are, what they look like, religion, sex, or sexual orentation. What should matter is what is on the inside of you.

*How could you be so vain?*

Love much, Iccess McMorgan

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Comments (14)

	xxafireinsidexx: 04/19/2007 8:54 AM interesting! lol it was good keep up the good work!
	Tomii: 04/28/2007 7:03 AM APPLAUSE very good! i liked it
	livethewayiwant: 04/28/2007 1:56 PM yeay! thank you!
	gothprinces: 05/01/2007 4:01 PM is the boy gay.its fab.!!!!!!
	livethewayiwant: 05/01/2007 5:44 PM is that a Q? well, yes they are........and thank you! you really think that it is good?
	gothprinces: 05/03/2007 12:21 PM yes i do!!!!how r u on this fine day?
	gothprinces: 05/03/2007 12:23 PM yes thats ok.gays r still humans and equel in every way.i spelt = wrong.lol.sorry.im the worst speller.
	livethewayiwant: 05/03/2007 2:09 PM gothprinces said: yes i do!!!!how r u on this fine day? im like so vaige rite now.....you?.....and im not perfect either....yes, yes---we all know thats hard to believe but im not! lol
	dhishot: 05/19/2007 10:10 AM i'm crying here! literally! god its lovely! xxxxxxxxxxx
	livethewayiwant: 05/19/2007 11:28 AM dhishot said: i'm crying here! literally! god its lovely! xxxxxxxxxxx thanx, i try
	suicidalxxromance: 06/01/2007 7:03 AM i like it alot,great work:p esther
	livethewayiwant: 06/02/2007 9:39 AM THANX!!
	dhishot: 06/15/2007 8:25 AM Dont say that they're not gay! DON'T RUIN IT FOR US! we still fantisize.....
	livethewayiwant: 06/15/2007 7:19 PM lol.....oh, sorri

this is the way it was suppose to be, i hate you for my misery

My First Entry of My Poetry Tell me if its good or bad!!

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